From cc9be34742a77acc3541f18ea7f9dcd521f1ca71 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001
From: rhiaro <amy@rhiaro.co.uk>
Date: Tue, 22 Oct 2019 21:44:07 +0100
Subject: [PATCH 1/4] Editorial rephrasing towards #48

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 index.html | 12 ++++++------
 1 file changed, 6 insertions(+), 6 deletions(-)

diff --git a/index.html b/index.html
index a6d0cd94..60da81bc 100644
--- a/index.html
+++ b/index.html
@@ -937,11 +937,11 @@ <h2>
       </p>
 
       <p>
-It is desirable that we enable tree-based processing of <a>DIDs</a> that include
-<a>DID fragments</a> (which resolve directly within the <a>DID document</a>) to locate
-metadata contained directly in the <a>DID document</a> or the service resource
-given by the target URL without needing to rely on graph-based processing.
+Implementations need not rely on graph-based processing of <a>DID documents</a>
+to locate metadata contained in the <a>DID document</a> when the <a>DID</a> includes
+a <a>DID fragment</a>. Tree-based processing can be used instead.
       </p>
+
       <p>
 Implementations SHOULD NOT prevent the use of <a>JSON Pointer</a> ([[!RFC6901]]).
       </p>
@@ -2026,8 +2026,8 @@ <h2>
 this approach is to provide a low barrier to entry while still ensuring global
 interoperability between a heterogeneous set of software systems. This section
 describes some of these approaches, which will likely go unnoticed by most
-developers, but whose details will be of interest to implementers. The most
-noteworthy syntactic sugars provided by JSON-LD are:
+developers, but whose details will be of interest to implementers. 
+Noteworthy features provided by JSON-LD are:
       </p>
 
       <ul>

From 9cd6649309755d4652cf2e2847ccc048d598132d Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001
From: rhiaro <amy@rhiaro.co.uk>
Date: Tue, 22 Oct 2019 22:34:18 +0100
Subject: [PATCH 2/4] Editorial tweaks to abstract, for #38 and #40

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 index.html | 8 ++++----
 1 file changed, 4 insertions(+), 4 deletions(-)

diff --git a/index.html b/index.html
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--- a/index.html
+++ b/index.html
@@ -139,8 +139,8 @@
 are designed to enable the controller of a <a>DID</a> to prove control over
 it and to be implemented independently of any centralized registry,
 identity provider, or certificate authority. <a>DIDs</a> are URLs that relate
-a <a>DID subject</a> to means for trustable interactions with that subject.
-<a>DIDs</a> resolve to <a>DID documents</a> &mdash; simple documents that describe how
+a <a>DID subject</a> to means for trustable interactions with that subject by way
+of a <a>DID document</a>. <a>DID documents</a> are simple documents that describe how
 to use that specific <a>DID</a>. Each <a>DID document</a> may express cryptographic
 material, verification methods, and/or <a>service endpoints</a>. These provide
 a set of mechanisms which enable a <a>DID controller</a> to prove control of the
@@ -148,8 +148,8 @@
 subject</a>.
     </p>
     <p>
-This document specifies a common data model, format, and operations that
-all <a>DIDs</a> support.
+This document specifies a common data model, a URL format, and a set of operations for
+<a>DIDs</a> and related components.
     </p>
   </section>
 

From 5111c1c5802e13e86f6b04589ecafc86dc6180db Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001
From: Amy Guy <amy@rhiaro.co.uk>
Date: Sat, 26 Oct 2019 19:23:25 +0100
Subject: [PATCH 3/4] Editorial

Co-Authored-By: Ted Thibodeau Jr <tthibodeau@openlinksw.com>
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 index.html | 2 +-
 1 file changed, 1 insertion(+), 1 deletion(-)

diff --git a/index.html b/index.html
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--- a/index.html
+++ b/index.html
@@ -149,7 +149,7 @@
     </p>
     <p>
 This document specifies a common data model, a URL format, and a set of operations for
-<a>DIDs</a> and related components.
+<a>DIDs</a>, and related components.
     </p>
   </section>
 

From ee4c5e84b14a6e2a002fa7494bcba30f81e8cadb Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001
From: rhiaro <amy@rhiaro.co.uk>
Date: Sat, 26 Oct 2019 19:39:34 +0100
Subject: [PATCH 4/4] More specific in abstract

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 index.html | 2 +-
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diff --git a/index.html b/index.html
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--- a/index.html
+++ b/index.html
@@ -149,7 +149,7 @@
     </p>
     <p>
 This document specifies a common data model, a URL format, and a set of operations for
-<a>DIDs</a>, and related components.
+<a>DIDs</a>, DID documents, and DID methods.
     </p>
   </section>